REICHENBACH vs ROSTISLAV
@Reichenbach:
Total: 80/100
@Rostislav - Total: 81/100
Total: 80/100
- Attacks 54/65
- Creativity 23/25
First: I like how he just takes it! Definitely not seen as often. Otherwise a pretty simple kick, very easy to imagine. Second: I like how there’s a bit more than a simple charge—also trying to trip Rostislav up is creative and unique, I don’t see that very often! - Realism 19/25
First: I like how you add in pain and damage from Rosti’s bite, as Reich made no move to dodge it. It isn’t a drastic attack, so no points are really lost on realism here. Second: It seems a bit too busy, both trying to ram him with his chest and use a hoof to trip him? I feel like to get the full effect of a ram, he’d have to have all four hooves planted and driving into the ground! - Metrics 12/15
First: Clean and easy to read! I like how Reich throws in a smile, it’s very in-character for him. Few grammatical mistakes, nothing distracting from the post itself. Second: Again, I love the feel you get for Reich in your writing—it all flows so well from one paragraph to the next, it really draws me in.
Noteworthy: I love how lazy he seems in the first post, and the feel it gives the reader for who Reich is and his purpose for the fight!
- Creativity 23/25
- Blocks 26/35
- Creativity 11/15
Nice simple post, but the way you describe it and Reich’s reaction helps to give it a facelift! Otherwise it’s a pretty straightforward dodge. - Realism 11/15
I would have liked to see a bit more awkwardness in it (since she was described as moving “too quickly to follow,” I’d expect there to be a scramble to get away rather than an elegant dodge), but the instinct is there and believable - Metrics 4/5
A little repetitive, but well written and nothing too distracting.
- Creativity 11/15
@Rostislav - Total: 81/100
- Attacks 54/65
- Creativity 20/25
First: I like how he isn’t quite comfortable attacking from behind but goes along with it anyway. Otherwise it’s a pretty simple first attack, but I appreciate how visual it is and the whole jump-in, jump-out sort of attack style. Second: I like that his bonded is involved in this; the way you write it, as Damaris just taking over to protect Rosti, definitely comes across and adds a few bonus points in my opinion. - Realism 24/25
First: Nothing too crazy, though Reich is quite a bit taller than Rosti, but I’m sure he’d be able to figure it out nonetheless. Because Rosti is a bit bulkier it’s kind of hard to imagine him being agile enough to really “whirl” away from a retaliation though! Second: I love how much contrast is painted between Rosti and Reich; it definitely goes hand in hand with the kick to the throat he takes. - Metrics 10/15
First: Few mistakes, easy to read and understand what’s going on. Second: A few more spelling mistakes that I had to reread a couple of times, but overall the post is clean. A little choppy at the end between Damaris’ and Rosti’s attacks on Reich, but the meaning comes across.
- Creativity 20/25
- Blocks 28/35
- Creativity 12/15
A pretty simple dodge, but one that I can see being effective! I especially like how he does it out of awareness, that he’s analyzing the situation the entire time. - Realism 12/15
Man I love how he learned from Aislinn’s attack and uses it to counter Reich’s! However, armor is heavy and I think it would have been pretty realistic if he were a bit more winded or bruised underneath? Nonetheless I like that he’s aware of their legs and tries to not get entangled in them. - Metrics 4/5
I’m impressed with your improvement from your last battle! This one flowed so nicely, and there were very few grammatical or spelling mistakes that I could find overall.
- Creativity 12/15
